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 Post subject: My short film
PostPosted: August 23rd, 2007, 10:59 pm 
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I was wondering if I could get the opinions of fellow Wes Anderson fans on my short movie. I figure you guys will be the most accurate judges since your taste is most likely, similar to mine, and therefore the audience I would be going for. Thanks for any and all feedback. http://www.veoh.com/videos/v1018562jNSdDJRq


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 Post subject: Re: My short film
PostPosted: August 24th, 2007, 12:49 am 
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the opening shots looked good, but I stopped caring at about the five-minute mark.


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 Post subject: Re: My short film
PostPosted: August 24th, 2007, 9:49 am 
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So, PREFACE: I am not a film expert.

PREFACE II: I really like it, actually (I say actually because pete didn't seem especially interested).

I think the first 5 minutes are really good. Throughout, you have a good sense of framing and editing... those aspects really shine out to me. On those fronts, the two things that stood out to me were: the framing of the house shot in the opening credits & the diner scene, when he calls on his blues music.

Parts of it seem forced or cliche. i.e. the Busch Light drinking Fall Out Boy fans... the hipster in the diner (plus, I wonder if hipsters who dress like mods and Fall Out Boy fans are the same?)... the main character's dialogue in the diner seemed forced.

The images in the talent show montage didn't add up to me. It seemed like he was channeling general misery... to me, it would make more sense to focus on the blues, and the type of misery that it spoke to... but, I could be wrong here? I also wish he would have at least strummed on his guitar...

The end is brilliant, I think.

Sorry if this sounds like a paper critique. =) But, overall, I found it to be a fine short film. Interesting and professional... and in many ways, original... is this your first?


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 Post subject: Re: My short film
PostPosted: August 24th, 2007, 1:24 pm 
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Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it. Yeah this is my first short film. A lot of the things you mention happen to be my same qualms with the movie myself. A lot of those problems were born out of a lack of resource and the fact that we had no money at all. I think that a lot of the dialogue seems forced because it is being read by non-actors too, but maybe that is just me trying to make myself feel better. Thanks again.


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